eboney

Category: Writers Block

Post 1 by Fruity Biscuit (fluffy things are grate come join me on my cloud. ) on Sunday, 05-Mar-2006 11:50:28

The ebony cloud around her face,
The sapphire blue of her eyes,
A pool of terra in a face stark white with shock
What happened to this beauty.

Under the water she looks so surrine,
At peace, yet so terrifyingly still.

So the nightmares begin.

As we pull her out, hair clings to her stark white features.
Then the marks are visible, purple and black,
So vivid against the milk white skin at her throat.
Her breasts are a swollen bloody pulp,
Her ribs a dented mass.
The beauty had taken a beating for certain.
But why?, that is my job.

The nightmares began after the visit to the mortuary
Seeing that beauty so beaten and bruised.
In the dreams, she is calling to me,
begging for help as an unknown being throws her in the dark waters.
At first she lingers on the surface, but soon she is pulled deep, deep, down.
Her hair a cloud around her face, the bruises not yet formed.
Yet a darker cloud surrounds her sinking form,
Then I know? Oh what a shock.
The blood is pouring from a source still unknown.

The pathology report, says, and oh can I tell.
But I must, must find relief for this beautiful girl

Her lover consumed with anger and hate, had beaten her to a pulp.
And left her to drown. She was alive, if only we had gotten the call earlier.
Then maybe we could have saved her.
What a waist of a life. She was seventeen,

Now my job is done, will the nightmares go away. But then will i miss the sapphire eyes,
They are so blue, and haunting, yet they draw me on.

Post 2 by Resonant (Find me alive.) on Sunday, 05-Mar-2006 12:14:00

Ooh! A plot and everything. And a bit quirkier with the rhythm. It's great that you're posting these chicky.

Post 3 by HauntedReverie (doing the bad mango) on Sunday, 05-Mar-2006 12:45:19

wow, that was amazing. I really did like it. Good job Linzey

Post 4 by Daenerys Targaryen (Enjoying Life) on Sunday, 05-Mar-2006 14:32:10

I like it good job.

Post 5 by Beth (Generic Zoner) on Sunday, 05-Mar-2006 15:59:08

Wow that ws really good and so vivid keep writing smiles

Post 6 by sweet as honey (Newborn Zoner) on Sunday, 05-Mar-2006 16:06:38

lindsey that is really good write more well done!

Post 7 by PorkInCider (Wind assisted.) on Sunday, 05-Mar-2006 16:10:36

nice work Linds, thanks.

Post 8 by Vulpine (Generic Zoner) on Sunday, 05-Mar-2006 16:29:48

Told you, you should keep writing! This is excellent too!

Post 9 by Goblin (I have proven to myself and the world that I need mental help) on Monday, 06-Mar-2006 8:38:15

Stunning and highly descriptive you can almost feel her pain during the beating.

Post 10 by jessmonsilva (Taking over the boards, one topic at a time.) on Monday, 06-Mar-2006 9:04:28

OMG! Lindsay! That almost made me cry. You are an excellent writer, gosh, keep it up chicka, you are amazing, both you and Kai, lol.

Post 11 by JH_Radio (I've now got the silver prolific poster award! wahoo!) on Monday, 06-Mar-2006 14:31:57

Aww, poor girl! Good work

Post 12 by poet (The premium poet) on Monday, 06-Mar-2006 14:58:15

Indeed, poor girl. She didn't deserve anything that happened to her. Seventeen! What a wasted life! She could have been anything!
God, I feel her pain, not almost, but entirely.

Post 13 by lights_rage (I just keep on posting!) on Monday, 06-Mar-2006 18:34:23

damn that was good need to read this board more often

Post 14 by Pure love (I'm going for the prolific poster awards!) on Tuesday, 07-Mar-2006 10:11:25

Oh my god sis, that made me sad. But it is a great writing style. And yet - there are so many criminal people who do this to young girls. It's so close to reality.

Post 15 by poet (The premium poet) on Tuesday, 07-Mar-2006 12:28:52

yes, how true that is.

Post 16 by laced-unlaced (Account disabled) on Friday, 02-Jun-2006 9:16:44

that's nice